I can't give any critiques or any constructive help for writing, unfortunately, but I will gush over how much I enjoyed reading this! <3

It left me wanting to read more about these two characters (and not just in hopes of there being some hot and steamy action (that is always a plus though!)) and I like to think that if a story can do that then the author is obviously doing something right! Something about the way you write really appeals to me, and I can't quite pinpoint any one thing in particular...haha, point being, I really loved it, and now I shall go hunt down more of your stories >:3